Poetry in Dog Years

[Drakkenfyre]

The dragon glides into a landing...WHOA!!!!! *slides across a newly waxed floor and crashes into the wall* BULLDOG!!! I can't believe you waxed the bloody floor!!! *wipes self off*



Anyway, just wanted to say hello and tell you that even though you are no longer with me physically you are always in my thoughts. I hope all is well with you.



That said, you ever wax the floors again, I swear I will flame you.



The Lady Dragon



Ahem....Neener...neener....neener.



*Bring me the remote....The goat?.....The REMOTE!!*

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[funkyasian]

awesome as usual andi...i wish i had more descriptive praises, but being insanely tired...i can't think of anything else beyond awesome...and wow...



steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[ExtraFlameyWT]

Good to see you, Andi! As for the poem...it was very intense. The feelings very strong...



I hope to see more poetry soon!



Love,



Aimee

[Tara22]

oooooh bulldog! loved it!!!

Quote:

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i am still

surviving alone

i know i can't give you back

everything you gave

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so good!!! I loved these lines!!!!!

"Will, I know what sparkage means, and it's definitely, one-hundred percent, there"- The Crying Game (by Vix84)

[ninjitsugrrl]

Wow, a very intense poem. The first two lines are very powerful, "i hate her hands/ that carry so much in them". Awesome!

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[pacou]

Quote:

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your bravery

beauty

stuffed

into the creases of her knuckles

unseen

into the spaces between her fingers

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Love those lines!



Wow, thanks! Very wonderful and powerful poem! Was a bit surprising for me though, because it was a rather agressive and "angry" poem, but I liked it



Looking forward to your new stuff!



-Viv-

[barnabasvamp]

Andi, sweetie....

Estatic that you are back, and writing again. Can't keep a *good* woman down!

I will deinitely be waiting for the *exploration* of the hands to "come". I know you were saving it for me.

This poem, trying to help-but unable to. Alone? Never darlin...

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[bulldog tidnab]

Blech. Today I am feeling kinda icky, but I thought I would do replies to feedback cause, well, I'm bored. Also, it snowed here today and I'm thinking I'd like to avoid looking out the windows while I'm at it. Sound good? I thought so.



Steph - Thanks dear. Hmm... Methinks perhaps you should have been sleeping instead of reading poetry though. A tired Steph just will not do!



Aimee - Hee. It's good to be seen. Yeah it was kinda intense huh? Supposed to be though, as it was kind of a knee-jerk reaction poem. If that makes any sense. Think about what I said regarding the asshole problem... cause you know, if it doesn't improve.... there's always Minnesota!



Tara22 - You know, I was just thinking that I think you've given feedback for every poem I've posted. *sniff* I'm touched. Really. That's so cool. I'm glad you liked this. I thought briefly about not posting it since it was more of a personal thing, as opposed to being strictly W/T, but I figured I would bend the rules just before the breaking point. I'm bad, what can I say.



ninjitsugrrl - *stares at your avatar* Oh, Uh, Sorry bout that. Hee. Thank you. I always question the first lines of any poem I write. I want it to work well and apparently it did. Yay! *goes back to staring at your avatar*



pacou - Hey there. Hopefully, you were suprised in a good way? It was agressive and angry, but I'm finding that the mood of my writing is going through a bit of a change. I don't think it will all be like this, but it is definitely heading away from whimsy. No time for it in my life right now. I'm hoping that it manages to be real and something that people find they can relate to. Keep reading, it could get interesting in here.



Jean - It's good to be back. Oh I don't know about being a good woman, but I try. The exploration of hands is coming... in time. It's something that is being reworked right now. Gotta get it right ya know? And the poem yeah, I find that when I want to help, I often find that my hands are tied. It can be infuriating. As for alone, in the the physical sense, I very much so am most of the time. I'm getting used to it, but it gets pretty lonely at times.



I'm currently working on several things right now. Many are ready to post, but I confess that I am going through a bit of a stage fright thing right now. Once I get my nerve back I will add to the thread. Eep.



*woof*

Out of the night that covers me/Black as the Pit from pole to pole



I thank whatever gods may be/For my unconquerable soul

[barnabasvamp]

How can you be alone??? You have all us "kitties"!!

Take your time, we can wait.

Jean

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[ExtraFlameyWT]

*runs in and gives bulldog a BIG hug* thanks for offering...i've got some good news, though. and take your time on the poetry...we'll all be here waiting.



Love,



Aimee

[Tara22]

*gives bulldog a huge hug*



aaaw.. you don't have to be surprised that I reviewed every poem, you are a damn great poet and I always love reading them! *hugs again* plus I believe that a great poem deserves feedback! well, any poem does really, but yours especially



I'm so sorry that you're not feeling well at the moment... but remember! you always have us kitties!! we love you! and if you ever need anything, to talk or whatever, don't be afraid to bark...



*hugs*

always happy to read your stuff, so whenever you post the new stuff, I'll be here, crawling under the door to see it



you're the best bulldog!

"Will, I know what sparkage means, and it's definitely, one-hundred percent, there"- The Crying Game (by Vix84)

Edited by: Tara22  at: 11/5/02 2:56:41 pm

[funkyasian]

hmmm...sleeping...well, sleep is overrated. completely overrated.



so...where's the next poem?! c'mon!! i'm dying here without another poem!!!



steph



oh yeah...btw...*hugs*

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[KKAT]

Andi,I hope you are feeling better.I am sorry you are in pain

but it is the only way. Take care.

[Tara22]

*stunned silence*



wow... bulldog! I really liked that!! It was just amazing!!

Quote:

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sometimes

when the night stretches

into forever

and i fear i feel too much

i look for an end

the out somewhere

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I have two favourite quotes

Quote:

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so that i can finally

finally

for tonight

find some

rest

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*little shivers run down her spine*



I would have quoted the whole thing if that didn't defeat the whole purpose of quoting!!



Really really amazing *hugs*



Thank you so much for this!

"Will, I know what sparkage means, and it's definitely, one-hundred percent, there." - The Crying Game (by Vix84)

Edited by: Tara22  at: 11/6/02 11:29:46 pm

[funkyasian]

andi, that was so intense...i felt that, or rather i feel that. the want...need. you're more amazing than you give yourself credit for...



now the compliments are out of the way...YOU SHOULD BE RESTING!!!! - don't make me get all mother hen on you. cuz...well, i will!!! sheesh...there are enough insominiacs out there already...(me being one of them), we dont' need another one in our ranks...please bulldog? take care of yourself...



as always, need anything, let me know...be well...



steph



ps - the poem was really really really awesome...i'm still speechless about it...

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[Drakkenfyre]

"You're not alone." comes a voice..."Who said that?"

"Oh I don't know. Could be the dragon hanging out of your WINDOW!!!!"



Andi, only have a few seconds here but your new poems...DAMN DAWG!!! You are good. I bow before you. I will write a little more indepth later. I need coffee!!!



Oh and Andi, You need to blow your nose.



The Lady Dragon

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[mollyig]

Your use of the words "pool" and "contours" make it seem like a physical search for the out somewhere not yet searched the place where she can finally for tonight find some rest



Nicely done.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[barnabasvamp]

Andi...Your Lady Dragon cracks me up. I bet she made you smile

The poem

I'm still struggling with what to say about it. Sometimes the words we know just are not enough. Maybe I'll just make some up....

Intenselyamazing, and insightfullyintrospective. There.

Jean

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[ninjitsugrrl]

You paint such a vivid picture of loss and ... searching for the right word ... desperation. The opening lines are especially strong, "sometimes/ when the night stretches / into forever / and i fear i feel too much." I think you must have a wonderful insight into human emotion because you always express feelings so clearly in your poetry.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[ExtraFlameyWT]

*thud*.........



wow



love you, andi!



aimee

[bulldog tidnab]

wow... i've been slackin' here. I gotta quit doin' that. No poem right now... i've got one, but i'm holding off, might post later today or tomorrow though... so you have been warned.



Tara22 - well thank you my dear. shivers huh? well go me. yeah, quoting the whole thing might have been a little much. but i'm so glad you liked it.



Steph - Thanks. Yeah, want and need were really the prevalent themes on this one. I had a long night that night and that's what popped out. And bah! Resting Schmesting! As for needing anything, maybe a shirt that is not so atrocious... . and maybe something sinful, but lord knows i find enough sin on my own. Hee.



Laura - A dragon haging out of my window huh? well it's better than a rat i suppose. Confess I was suprised to see you pop in, but greatly pleased. I'm glad you like the new stuff... going through a bit of a writing evolution right now, hopefully it doesn't suck too bad. And yeah you're right... I DO need to blow my nose. *makes mental note*

"Do you think there's life on other planets?" "What do you care? You don't have a life on this planet!"

Love you dear. Take care of you ok? I mean it! Don't make me get growly!



mollyig - Yes. A physical search, a mental one, emotional... the whole bit. Desperation can be a powerful thing and one can find themselves attempting all things to find what one is searching for. What they need if you will. I'm glad you liked.



Jean - Yeah, she cracks me up all the damn time. And she is very rarely not able to make me smile. Well, except when she being a mule. Wow, you made up new words for this huh? I am touched. So glad you liked it. Oh and hands are still coming... eventually. I'm just stalling. it's all about antici....pation baby!



ninjitsugrrl - yes... desperation. like i said to Steph, it was a loooong night when i wrote that. I don't know about my insight into human emotion... i just call things as I feel them. and i try to write what i know. I'm glad you think feelings are well expressed in my poetry, cause well, it doesn't always work so well in RL. Oh have I mentioned that I LOVE your writing? and i spent a good hour today wasting time at your homepage. I now know what kind of snack food i am... and thank god for that!



Aimster - Oh dear... you went *thud* oops. sorry darlin'. thanks though.. i am most pleased you liked this. Love you dear.



Ok kiddies... something new... very very soon... scout's honor. (and i was a scout!) bwa ha ha ha ha!!!!



*woof*

Beyond this place of wrath and tears/Looms but the horror of the shade/And yet the menace of the years/Finds, and shall find me, unafraid.

[bulldog tidnab]

ok... here it is kids... it's new... it's improved... it's still a little rough.

here's hoping you like it.





i'm lying here

on my back

in the night

and i lie here

alone

and i count

i count the satellites

they are numbered you see

i have given them

designations

an order to be found

inside my mind

i must do this

i must

or it all gets lost

all of it

every moment

every night

every drop of dew

clinging to

my back

this was easier before

when i didn't have to

give them

a place in the line

we did it together

found

order in chaos

salve for the wounds

caused by fools

healed by each other

i can not lose that

i will not

i cling to the thought of you

like the strands of a dream

lost in the moments of waking

and when i can think of nothing else

when you are lost to me

i do the only thing i can

i lie here

in the night

in the dark

and oh god

how i wish you were here

i wish you were here

to help me count

count the satellites





*woof*



edited cuz: numebred is not a word.

Beyond this place of wrath and tears/Looms but the horror of the shade/And yet the menace of the years/Finds, and shall find me, unafraid.

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 11/19/02 12:03:41 pm

[ExtraFlameyWT]

Wow, Andi...

Quote:

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salve for the wounds

caused by fools

healed by each other

i can not lose that

i will not

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you can really feel all the emotions in your words...this is absolutely amazing.

Great poem, Andi...



Love,

Aimee

[funkyasian]

Andi!!!! *hugs*

Quote:

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cling to the thought of you

like the strands of a dream

lost in the moments of waking

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just...wow... - you are truly truly talented...and it's my turn to bow to you...*paying homage to the bulldog*



steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[barnabasvamp]

Andi,

I can't even make up a word for this one.

It felt like inner thoughts, perhaps with eyes closed?

Jean

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[Tara22]

ooooooh.... I loved it!!! as always!

Quote:

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i must

or it all gets lost

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wow... so powerful!

***

"Oh, sorry. Uhh, I forgot that that doesn't seem normal, to the rest of society. It's just, we, well, we both really like cows. Really like them. To the extent of wanting to buy one, when we're older." - The Crying Game (by Vix84)

[infinitelight]

Oh, that was beautiful. Thanks!



Heh. I don't think 'numebered' is a word either (insert evil smily face here).

[ninjitsugrrl]

"i cling to the thought of you/ like the strands of a dream" These lines really just took my breath away! Once again, a great poem.

I'm glad you enjoyed my Web page. Sorry if it distracted you from more important things. And, what kind of snack food are you? This is an important thing to know about a person.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[bulldog tidnab]

i felt like doing replies instead.



Aimster - Thank you. Most importantly thank you for telling me to hit the add reply button. I am most appreciative. Quite pleased that the emotion is getting through, it can get eaten when one gets too wordy.



Steph - *hugs* Cause you know, yay hugs! Hmmm... talented huh? Well I think I shall simply take your word for it. Wow, paying homage huh? I feel like a religious shrine now. Weird. Temple of the Dog? No wait, that was that one band with the guy from Soundgarden and the dude from Pearl Jam... nevermind. *realizes she has just confirmed that she is indeed a nerd*



Jean - Couldn't even think of a word? Aww shucks. Hmmm... inner thoughts? Always. That's what it's about. Every. Single. Time. And you know... "I close my eyes in order to see."



Tara22 - See and here you are again. Replies are so dependable from you. Even if no one else reads it, I'm guaranteed you will. Thanks dear! *hugs*



infinitelight - Hey there! Long time no see. Did you get lost for a bit? I'm glad you liked it. And I was REALLY hoping numebred was a word or at least that no one would notice it wasn't, but then I went to dictionary.com and guess what? No such word. Damn!



ninjitsugrrl - Well, I hope you got your breathe back. I'm so glad you liked this. And honestly, what could be more important than enjoying myself on your web page? I mean come on! I know I'm a Twinkie now! And that I'm Thomas Pynchon... and an old t-shirt... and most importantly, I smell fine. .



Ok... side note... I am readin a fantastic book right now. _The Acid House_ by Irvine Welsh. (same guy who wrote Trainspotting) Seriously, if you get a chance read it. It's bizarre, twisted as all hell and oddly enough, excellent bedtime reading. Speaking of bed time... My time has come. More poetry soon... I think.



*woof*

Beyond this place of wrath and tears/Looms but the horror of the shade/And yet the menace of the years/Finds, and shall find me, unafraid.

[funkyasian]

hey andi...okay, see i know that temple of the dogs reference...they had that one song...i remember a lot of screaming...perhaps it was me running out of the room when the video came on...



anyway, so about the establishment of the temple of the dog...we'll have a permenant shrine...where again??!!



so you better have gotten enough sleep, or else...i'll...get all angry and start with the whole ankle biting thing...



soooo...where's the next poem huh?? huh??? huh????



steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde