Poetry in Dog Years

[Tara22]

wow! I loved it!



favourite lines

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these moments when i have you

where i want you

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and

Quote:

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i dare you to let me

possess you

become you

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such a good poem!!





aaaw, my drool adds character to the thread? you always know what to say, don't you

Tara: Every time I... even when I'm at my worst, you
always make me feel special. How
do you do that?





Willow: Magic

Edited by: Tara22 at: 10/9/02 5:24:40 pm

[barnabasvamp]

Andi;

Quote:

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the intensity of our longing

breathless impatience

binds you up

makes you mine

allows you to surrender

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3 for this one and



Very touching... I think you've got one up on the DL now!

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[vix84]

Wow. *dizzy*

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where i want you

against me

inside me

everywhere at once

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That was, well, hot.



I love your poems, bulldog. Especially this type, heh. More please?

[mollyig]

Desire so deliciously described.



And on a totally off topic note I love that you used "become you", it being an Indigo Girls album and all!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[infinitelight]

Yay smut! *cough* Wait, I meant Yay fine literary effort! Yeah, that's what I meant.



The angsty poem ('there are words') made me all sniffly-like. The five-minute (!) poem, too, particularly 'that which is right and not what is easy'. I'm such a big baby.



The risque poems are just beautiful--so passionate. Your style is so perfect for this. I approve heartily of your one-track-minded muse. I'd like to buy that muse a cup of coffee.

Hahahahaha. No.

[bulldog tidnab]

Tara22 - I'm glad you liked it. Seems to be a recurring theme. And you know, you may think I always know what to say, but I bet if you really knew me... you probably wouldn't think so. I am good at blurting out the wrong things.



Jean - Thanks for the thuds. Though I have to say I feel rather unworthy of them. And I doubt I will ever have one up on the dragon. I would be honored to just break even sometimes.



vix84 - Dizzy huh? Sorry. *sheepish grin* Glad to know you like them. As for more, see the end of this post.



mollyig - Thank you. From you it is a wonderful compliment. I confess that the IG title was an accident, but I'm glad you enjoyed it's use.



infinitelight - Smut huh? Sorry I made you sniffly. However, I doubt that you are a big baby. Just honest with yourself in some regards I suspect. The muse is always up for coffee... BUT:



And here is the end of the post, directed to all of you wonderful people who have read any words I have seen fit to post.

I have more I could give you. Many words spewing forth from my oh-so-muddled brain, but I fear that they would be unfit. Looking around this board, I have read some of the most amazing things I could ever hope to experience. Much of it from many of the writers who have seen fit to post in this thread. For that, I thank you. Really. It means a lot. In ways you will never be able to imagine. As I have said previously on this board, the Pens has been here when I needed it the most, when no one could be. It amazes me everyday.

Starting my thread up again was in some small way an attempt to give something back. Anything at all. Unfortunately, it occurs to me that it is not up to standard. And really, when compared to the gifts I have been given because of this wonderful place, not at all worthy. Therefore, I kind of question posting my next bit of nothing. It is ready to be posted, but I don't know if I am. (if that makes sense) We shall see. Perhaps things will look different to me in the morning.



*lies down and ponders her paws*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 10/10/02 9:59:12 pm

[Tara22]

bulldog, you sound like me! the wrong things slipping out...



oh no...you can't stop posting... I mean, I think your poems are really great! better than mine anyway... I wish I had read your earlier ones... (are they still here?)



anyway, regardless of your descision, just know that I think you are really talented! and that your poems are really really good!



Thank you so much for sharing what you have...

Tara: Every time I... even when I'm at my worst, you
always make me feel special. How
do you do that?





Willow: Magic

Edited by: Tara22  at: 10/10/02 10:34:59 pm

[Drakkenfyre]

Okay Andi, here are my thoughts. Not the Lady Dragon's but mine, Laura. First, I personally want to thank you for starting your thread up again. Your poems always continue to amaze me. I may not always be able to express myself correctly nor do I always like everything you write. Yet, I greatly admire you and any other poet who is willing to put themselves out here. It is not an easy thing to do. Sharing one's writing is somewhat akin to sharing a part of our soul.

Second- Whether you know it or are willing to admit it, your poems and your mere presence on this board is an inspiration to me and to many others. As is evidenced by the feedback you have received and the fact that many people who have visited your thread had never read poetry on the board before.

You are an inspiration to me. I am not referring to the poetry jihad that we have going on. I mean personally.

Third- Stop with the self-defeatist attitude. You don't let me get away with it. I won't let you either. I don't always like the poems that I post nor do I feel they are worthy at times. I post them in hopes that I will receive honest and constructive feedback. This will make me a better writer. Or at least, that is my hope.



Well, that is all I really have to say. Can you tell I'm a little grumpy this morning?



You know that I will respect and support whatever decision you make. I just needed you to know how I felt.





*My bologna has a first name...*

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[barnabasvamp]

Laura.... Well said.

I do think it is difficult with poetry, because it opens a small window to the soul. I think each and every one of us has a fear of letting someone into our soul, as it is the one thing that keeps us going, and we are afraid that people won't understand what they find.

However, you never know until you try, as you know just to well from your own writing.



Andi, pick up your ass, and get busy.....If you decide not to post again, I support ya.

Bulldogs don't whine, do they?(much?)

Quote:

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*My bologna has a first name...*

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TOO MUCH

Jean

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[bulldog tidnab]

or as i prefer to say... let's kick this pig.

My apologies for being a whiny-ass loser previously. in fact i should kick my own ass for it

So, let's start over and try this again:

Hi, my name is Andi. I'm the cutest damn dawg you could ever hope to meet.(loveable as hell too ) I am here to toss out some words. Read them love them leave me feedback. Hell HATE them (but not without leaving me feedback explaining yourself dammit! ) but they will be here.

Oh and Laura? "Yeah, I had some guacamole last night and it's still speakin' to me..."

also Tara22, my old thread is gone now, sorry. sadly i dont have copies what was there.

Oh hey Jean... thanks... consider me off my ass. really, thank you.



Now that I am done groveling ... here's something new... not overly happy, but i don't care... la la la la la...





i have known risk

and met well the failure

that goes in hand with it

all too often

so as bitter as it may seem

before we go any further on this

already all too rocky path

these are the things

you must hear

though it does pain me to say them:



i give you my heart,

but only after marking it

'return to sender'

just in case

you don't want it

just in case you throw

it aside without a second glance

like

everyone does

everything else



i give you my soul

marked 'fragile' in red letters

it breaks easily

and can shatter

when dropped too hard

here is my love

"do not rip, tear or bend"



i have been broken you see

by one who was too blind

to even look me

in the eye

i am lucky to be here

to be able to take this

risk that you so readily

offer

and i am sorry to give you

this mishandled

merchandise



love you?

i can

i do

but this trust you speak of

i fear i have much to learn

and for that

i am sorry



*woof*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

[Tara22]

wow! I really liked that Andi!!



loved the use of the

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i give you my heart,

but only after marking it

'return to sender'

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and

Quote:

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i give you my soul

marked 'fragile' in red letters

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thanks anyway about your old poems, I'm happy with yout new ones s

Tara: Every time I... even when I'm at my worst, you
always make me feel special. How
do you do that?





Willow: Magic

[barnabasvamp]

Andi;

You are just the cutest dawg, especially when you give yourself a "lickin" and jump right back into things!

Quote:

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i have been broken you see

by one who was too blind

to even look me

in the eye

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This sounds like a bit of a revelation, and then the love is still there, as always...

Quote:

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love you?

i can

i do

but this trust you speak of

i fear i have much to learn

and for that

i am sorry

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, goodness

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[infinitelight]

I'm sorry you were feeling all unworthy. I am, however, *delighted* to see another poem. For what it's worth, I've saved all your poems in this thread, because I love them so much I want to keep them. I was sitting at a red light on my way to work this week, tapping my hands on the steering wheel, and this came into my head:



Forever coming back

To the point

Where you begin

And I

Cease to be



and it was in the back of my mind for the rest of the day. It's selfish of me, I know, to say 'your writing is important to *me*, and therefore valuable', but I don't know of any other way to put it. And while I know there are many other very talented writers on these boards (I recognize some of them posting in this thread), your poems touch me (oh, get your mind out of the gutter), so I respond (in feedback! Dammit! Now everything I write is sounding all porn-y).



So, in summary, bulldog posting poetry and more poetry for the enjoyment of all: good. bulldog feeling unworthy: bad.



The old thread: I found one of your old threads (poems dated 4/29, 4/30 and 5/1) in the 'Finished' archive a week or two ago and saved it. (Stalker, much?) Tara22, if that's the thread you want and you're still having trouble finding it, shoot me an email.



And now that I've been far, far too wordy: the new poem is lovely and bittersweet (did not make me sniffle, this time, but I'm feeling exceedingly tough today). I liked the rhythm of:



here is my love

"do not rip, tear or bend"

Hahahahaha. No.

[bulldog tidnab]

DAMN ADD REPLY BUTTON!

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 10/12/02 2:49:35 pm

[bulldog tidnab]

some replies to the feedback and then another one for you guys, cause lord nows it ain't for me.



Tara22 - Thank you lady. Actually apparently infinitelight has found the old ones. so if you want to read, pop her an email.



Jean - Yep, I am cute huh? *dawg's ego grows a bit* suppose i should stop saying that before I get a huge head. And yes, I am quite good at giving myself a lickin' *looks back at last sentence* oh, but for better wording. All my poems are revelations my dear, you just have to read 'em right is all. Ther love is always there too. It's all in the perspective I guess.



infinitelight - Or should I call you my little stalker? sorry i got stuck in your head, but hopefully i didnt cause any permanent damage.

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It's selfish of me, I know, to say 'your writing is important to *me*, and therefore valuable', but I don't know of any other way to put it

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Thank you. That means a whole hell of a lot to me. Really.

Good to know I "touch" you and that you "respond" Sorry, I couldn't resist, but you know, I AM a guttermind.



And without further ado..... more drivel!



embarking

on a shining journey

into a bright new world

into a small girl's arms

muscles, strong

still so thin

can't get over it

her waist

maybe you don't know

where she comes from

but she said

where i come from

the two of us

would be scared, threatened

she said

and the funny thing is

i'm the one with so much to lose



you are used to it

but not her

she just can't see

how you could be

serious about this

her

but you seem to be

she sees your face

at her every turn

and she carries

your fortune in her wallet

closes her mind for the first time

only read

"the heart is wiser

than the intellect"

because

if you're not scared

then she can't be



NOTE: this may be edited later this evening.



*woof*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

[barnabasvamp]

Quote:

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"the heart is wiser

than the intellect"

because

if you're not scared

then she can't be

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Loved this, and now I'm gonna be thinking these lines all day.

If you think about it, when it comes to love, isn't the heart Always wiser?

Thanks Andi

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[Tara22]

oooh! loved it!! (omg! little bouncy guy is red! that's so cool!)

Quote:

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and the funny thing is

i'm the one with so much to lose

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I love that and the part BV quoted! so good!!!



I deffinitly gonna try and see your oldies *grins at infinitelight*

Tara: Every time I... even when I'm at my worst, you
always make me feel special. How
do you do that?





Willow: Magic

[Drakkenfyre]

Well my dear, I see you have taken the offensive this time. Hmm...I believe I am falling behind in this war...Yet, to fall behind your poetry is not defeat...it is an honor.



I bow to you my friend. Your last work was lovely. These lines in particular struck me:

she sees your face

at her every turn

and she carries

your fortune in her wallet



To be honest, I'm not sure why they do...they just do... Hmm...that is the wonderful thing about poetry, you can be inspired and moved by the words but not be sure why...Gives us time to ponder....



*You got to know when to hold them*



The Lady Dragon

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[bulldog tidnab]

So I woke up to find that my thread had been given a G rating. Now while I totally understand the concept of rating the threads, I was disappointed (though not at all suprised) that this was the rating given. The rating given reflected the FIRST poem in this thread. Those of you who have actually read some of the others, would likely agree with me that this is definitely not a G thread.

I say I was not suprised, because it confirms my suspicions that poetry is apparently not taken very seriously on this board and is not actually read by particular individuals. However, as we all know, the FIC is really what matters here anyway right?

Sorry, venting a bit here. When I have cooled off a bit I intend to change the rating on this thread, likely to a PG-13 due to coarse language in replies and such (as I do not intend to censor myself in my own thread) with disclaimers immediately prior to anything that should be rated R or otherwise.

Sorry about not doing replies to feedback in this post, as I originally intended to this morning, but I rather felt like addressing this.



*growl*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 10/13/02 6:34:35 am

[Drakkenfyre]

Bravo my dear bulldog!! I stand steadfast beside you in this matter. As I read the post said only fics and stories. Neither of which are contained in your thread or mine. If the ratings are based solely on the first poem in our threads then that is truly sad. We as poets on the board have long been ignored. Only a select few people read us. Good for them!!!



I understand that the mods are busy. I applaud them for posting in all the fic, wallpaper, video threads. However, and this may get me kicked off the board, I have yet to see a mod post in a poetry thread.



Again, bulldog Bravo for taking a stand.



The Lady Dragon

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[barnabasvamp]

Here, here, BD and Lady Dragon



However, if someone is looking at ratings as a reason to go to a thread to read, then they are probably not really interested in the content!

Ratings should be an indication of what is in the thread, so people can make an informed decision on whether to read or not.

P.S. There are definitely places where only PG13 or R would do.



I say "don't sweat the small shit, life is too short"

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[Mighty Teeny Wiccan]

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Edited by: Mighty Teeny Wiccan at: 10/13/02 4:29:28 pm

[Mighty Teeny Wiccan]

losing mind





edited:this was the bulldog fighting with Tina's sig line. ignore this post and the previous. can't find the god damn motherfucking test your piece of shit sig thread.



FUCK!



k. done now

Edited by: Mighty Teeny Wiccan at: 10/13/02 4:36:46 pm

[bulldog tidnab]

Jean - Thanks darlin'. You know I am starting to think that maybe the the heart is wiser when it comes to most things. Too bad my mind keeps getting in my way. Stupid mind.



Tara22 - Thank you. I like those lines too. I was worried no one would like this one. I am much relieved now.



Laura - It's a jihad now huh? Hmmm... I'm involved in a poetry holy war, that's interesting. Oddly enough the lines you mentioned were inspired by a certain someone I know and her muse. Call it a gift. Was thinking about the concept of carrying someone along with you even when you cannot physically be there. And yes, the ability to ponder and draw one's own conclusion is the reason I write this stuff.

"Yeah, this is just like one of those carnie rides. When I get off I'll get some cotton candyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!"



Well I don't have any thing new right now that is postable here. Am working on some things, but I have no idea when they will be done. maybe in an hour, maybe in a year... we shall see.



love and puppy kisses to you all.



*woof*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 10/14/02 11:11:01 am

[barnabasvamp]

Pssstt....I'm on now also girl

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[bulldog tidnab]

Ha! nevermind!

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

Edited by: bulldog tidnab at: 10/14/02 7:49:35 am

[funkyasian]

*making mental note to self* - HAVE TO STOP BY ANDI'S THREAD MORE OFTEN!!!!



hey there...just wanted to give my applause at the last couple of poems...



steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[bulldog tidnab]

Thanks Steph. Feel free to stop in anytime. Thanks so much for the applause

Got a little something new for y'all. Sooner than I thought. It's... different. Not so happy.





i don't like this.

sitting here

arms wrapped

around drawn-up knees

shaking

isn't right

i know this

i'm not happy

i dread the night

it's always the same

the darkness enfolds me

chokes me

steals my air

thickening

tightening around the space that

is mine

until i sit bolt-upright

shaking

trying to rid myself

of fears

and pain

i thought myself

free of

part of the past

i wrap my arms around

my body

pray for it to stop

i do not like this





*woof*

I will go put some clothes on, ok.




Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!

[barnabasvamp]

Quote:

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Hello? Is this thing on?

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You are way too funny

Where was I? Oh yea, the poem....

Definitely a little darker, but does express the fear felt inside, and really Not liking it.

Well done woman, you are quick

Jean

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[Mighty Teeny Wiccan]

Darling 'Dog, You know how love others poetry, but yours, well,yours I can relate to. You give a voice to my real feelings, more than anybody else does. Thanks.

Tina