Hi Kittens! I luv you all!! Okay...here are the replies I promised so long ago. Once again, I'll be posting them a couple at a time, because when I try to do more than that the board eats my post. So...here it goes. There will be a couple more replies posted every 10 or 15 minutes or so until I've responded to everyone. Wow, I'm way late on both feedback and updates. Sorry everyone.
I've found myself with a massive amount of writers block where this fic is concerned. But I think I've finally snapped out of it.
The next update is on it's way. It's written, it just needs to go through the beta process....but when that's finished, then I'll be posting...Also, I'd just like to mention that there is only going to be about another.....3 or 4 updates before this story is actually completed. Wooo Hooo! Okay enough with the woo hooos I guess and on with the replies.
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Well, once again, you bring us true beauty in literary form, I have a feeling you could (& indeed do) weave beauty & magic into even the simplest of words.
Awww thank you so much!
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Okay, I shall address this last update in two parts ('cos otherwise I'd end up babbling & tying myself in knots and then you wouldn't know what I was talking about any more).
You of all people should know that I love a good babble.
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Firstly: Willow & Tara - You have captured the true love and passion they share in all it's intoxicating, breath-taking beauty It's wonderful & brilliant
Their game was so deliciously real, you could actually feel the tension building in both of them, feel them fighting to keep control - again, it was beautiful.
I have done a lot on the subject of true love and passion in this fic, but there hasn't been a lot with the playfulness. I'm really glad that you appreciated the game. I meant it to feel like an excerpt from taken from a larger text...but at the same time I wanted it to seem completed, when read. (if that makes any sense)
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The conflict that Donny was going through during his drive was so real & believable, his father has been a complete ass practically his whole life, but, he's still his father - that was a hard journey for Donny & I feel like I travelled it with him.
Thank you so much Jea. I actually have a crappy father, so I could put myself in Donny's shoes. And I had to, to write that part. It was kinda painful for me to go through the process of remembering how I felt in certain situations with my own father, but it was all worth it when I get responses like yours.
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So, Beth & Tara's father? Uhm, yeah, ewww *reflexive shiver of disgust* & Michael is Donny & Tara's brother? Wait, so, if Michael's 3... that means the thing between Tara's father & Beth started when Tara's mother was still alive, yes? I wonder if Tara's mother knew?
She seemed to be a smart lady...I'm sure she knew.
Thank you so much for the feedback sweetie. It means a lot to me.
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TeddyQuote:
You have an amazing ability to portray the erotic without falling into the cavernous cliches.
Thank you.
I try not to be too cliche (it's one of my many mission statements )
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I particularly find the contrast between the new lighthearted ease between Willow and Tara and the dramatic tension of Donnie/father quite riveting.
Believe it or not, but the contrast that you mentioned between the lighthearted Willow and Tara and the not so lighthearted tension between Donny and his father was actually something I did on purpose.
Yes...at last, something that did not happen by accident. hehe. I wanted to highlight both the girls' segements and Donny's segements in a seperate light, in order to kind of add to the dramatic effect. I'm glad it was taken so well...cause I wasn't sure that it would be, when I posted it.
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I am curious to see how the knowledge of her father's secret life and new half-sibling will affect Willow/Tara's path.
I'm sure it will add a little bump in the road, but nothing they can't get through of course.
Thank you Teddy, for your thoughtful feedback.
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DelWhickerQuote:
Well, Emms, I don't think there's anything I could say about this story that hasn't already been said, except that I'm loving it!
I'm so glad you like it sweetie.
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I hope that the money that Donny gave Beth wasn't from Tara's stash! Now that would throw a big ole wrench into the plan!
I don't think he would really do a thing like that to Tara.
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The RoseQuote:
I can never say enough about this story. The way you write is just so beautiful. The language just flows throughout the story.
Thank you so much sweetie. I'll never be able to express what your kind words and constant support have meant to me, throughout the years that I've been writing fics. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
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I liked the way that chapter moved between Willow and Tara's sweet/hot/playful moments, and Donny's anger, frustration, and semi-effective self-control.
Thank you. Like I said to Jeanne, I haven't concentrated a lot on the playful moments between the girls. So I am glad to see that it was taken so well by everyone. My worst fear was that people were going to be like..."That's so out of character!"
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What he's found out is going to affect Tara, and through her Willow, a great deal - even though they don't know yet, that reality felt that much more real by seeing events as they happened, not just hearing about them later.
I'm so glad that you think so. And I think you are absolutely right. There is a difference between seeing someone go through something firsthand as opposed to hearing about it later. I wanted the reader to really feel where donny was coming from in regards to his relationship with his father...it really has a love/hate kinda dynamic to it.
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That was great how you wrote Willow and Tara, like they're flourishing to life even more than they had been before - there was a real feeling of new life and joy about them. I hope they can hold on to it through finding out what Mr Maclay has been up to.
Again, thank you. They had just healed the fieild and I wanted to extend the life and vitality of the nature they had just brought back to life, into their own actions...it kind of illustrates the theme of this fic...that we are all connected to the earth.
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Mr Maclay and Beth... just... ew. And basically abandoning his first family, creep. Yay for Donny controlling himself though - he had every reason to be angry, and his upbringing has given him plenty of mixed feelings on anger and how to deal with it. But he, in essence, stood up to the Mr Maclay part of himself and faced it down. He's done a lot of growing up.
Exactly. That's it exactly Chris. Donny had to sort of face down his own demons in order to move to the next level. He had changed over the years and he was a completely different person, but he was still holding onto the guilt over what he had in the past. Holding onto that guilt was keeping him from growth. And he had to stand up to his father (that part of himself that he despised) and prove to himself that he wasn't that mean little boy anymore. He did that, so now he'll be able to move on with his life.
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The contrast between the two was awesome. I was totally thinking that Donny was going to shoot their Dad and then he would have become angry and mean like he was as a child.
I couldn't let Donny shoot his father, because the whole point was that he was able to control himself,and stand up to his father like a man (even though he didn't actually stand up to his father...his father just represented that part of himself that he despised ) So by
not shooting his father, he was able to prove to himself that he was indeed a changed man.
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Beth and Mr Maclay? That has an ewww factor of 857 million ewww's.
yeah...totally agree with ya on that point.
though it helps a little tiny bit that she is not related by blood...or even related leagally, cause that would have been 10 times worse, I think.
Loved the W/T interaction as well
Again, thank you.
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HennyQuote:
I can't wait Emms!!!!!!! We want more we want more.... or better yet I want more I want more.... I can't wait for more.
Than, it's more you shall have sweetie.
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singgirlQuote:
Whoa dude...that's some Jerry Springer shit...
indeed it is, singgirl....indeed it is...
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First there’s a “Whew.” thinking Donny had calmed down during the drive and was going to leave the firearm in the truck, then the “Uh oh.” he’s mad again, then.. “Oh crap.” discovering what his dad has been up to. UGH.
yeah....he was very wishy-washy there for a minute, wasn't he?
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Please tell me Beth forged the letter and set up a little scenario so that the boy would think his father was a total skuz to scam Donny into giving her money. Well, at least he left the gun in the truck. Back to “Whew.”
No such luck....his dad really is a total skuz....
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Drunk and playful Willow and Tara.. They’re having so much fun but what will happen when Donny returns? Will he tell Tara or will he keep it a secret knowing that the news would only serve to hurt his sister
I really don't know....it will be intersting to find out.
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and really.. hasn’t she been through enough? She needs Willowtime in Sunnydale! Great update.. Thanks!
yes...she has been through enough. *nods head* and she does need Willowtime.
I don't know if they'll make it to Sunnydale though...something tells me they wont. This story was never about Sunnydale, so I think taking them there would ruin something about this story that makes it special. Don't you think?
Thank you ever so much for your wonderful feedback sweetie. It's always appreciated.
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AnnaQuote:
What wonderful playfulness in this update. Ahhh... to be young, and in love in the summer time.
Yes...I personally think Summertime love is the best kind
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I like how you split between the happy lovers and the drive with Donny. His experience was perfectly awful!
yes it was. And I'm glad you could appreciate the split between dynamics...I wasn't so sure when I posted that it would recieve good reviews. But it did, so yay!
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Beth and their Dad? Just plain yucky!
Absolutely
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TeganQuote:
Emms...hun....Mr. Maclay and Beth?!?! THATS SO ICKY!!!
I must thank you though for doing that part AFTER the hot shower scene and the fun in the room...it just wouldn't have been the same. My luck I would've ended up with Beth/Maclay visuals *shudders in disgust*.
yes...Mr. Maclay and Beth were disgusting, but intricle to the plot.
oh and... Beth/Maclay visuals? *joins in the sudder*
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Carleen, Carleen, Carleen..... *shakes head slowly*
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Miss 'I don't sing' watson wrote:
What can I add that hasn't been said already, AND in out of tune song and dance.
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Who said I was out of tune????
I think we all just assumed, sweetie...
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The Queen of the Multi-fics, Emms wrote:
We can all aspire to Carleen's rare form of greatness....but most of us will never make it.
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I will gladly assist anyone who would like to achieve greatness as I have. I will even give a 10% discount on my consulting fee for any kitten.
It's nice to see capitalism is still alive and well.....
And a 10 percent discount on consulting fees?? You are too generous Car! You know...it's people like you that allow, we the everyday people...to dream big.
in hopes that some day *holds hand over heart in tribute to the American flag* some day....we might work hard and rise UP in this great nation...that we might save enough money to pay that lofty (yet reasonable
) consulting fee, so that we.....might have the opportunity to experience the type of greatness, that you yourself Carleen, have achieved. *nods head* yes....we can dream.
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So, when's the next update? NEED to know what's up with Donnie.
Just as soon as you beta it, dear.
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I tried to leave feedback on Wednesday but crashed my computer and lost what I had written, so I'm going to try to sum up:
OMG....that happens to me all the time!
But luckily I've learned to copy and paste the brilliant feedback I write ( and we all know it's brilliant, right??)
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this story is so sweet and good and so lovely. And I like it how just as all is well and the girls begin to get to resolution on the 'where will we live, will we be together' question, that the Donnie wrinkle happens. Looking forward to finding out what happens.
awww,
I am so happy that you are liking this story enough to leave feedback.
Thank you so much Sally.
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End of replies Stay tuned for the next update. xoxo
Emms