Well, to everyone who has posted, again, I’m sorry for the long delay in responding. Apparently I have a habit of forgetting about this baby and forgetting to check for feedback. Well, here we are and I’ll try to remedy that in short order.
tarebear –
I totally know that new and yet not new feeling with this board. As soon as you feel like there’s nothing you recognize, there’s an update to some old story and it’s like, “oh… there are those folks…”
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I'm revisiting this story and just noticed I never got a chance to leave proper feedback. Forgive me.
No problem.
I absolutely wanted to be able to portray the pageantry and formality of their lives but at the same time I wanted to express the extent to which their existence is governed by nature – crops, animals, war, children. Even magic is a part of their world and they have a responsibility to care for it as shown by the way magic is passed down through the non-magic users so that they can teach it to their children when the time comes.
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Answering the ultimate question of "does she or doesn't she?" regarding Willow's true feelings (love vs servitude) can be quite misleading if basing on Tara's POV alone because, as she has pointed out, she has a tendency for self-preoccupation.
Absolutely. I love playing with the concept of the unreliable narrator. How often are we expected to simply believe that what the narrator says is actually true? What if it’s not or what if s/he can’t see what’s true?
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Tara might have been a little hasty in her decision to free Dani,…
I think that’s an understatement. But ok.
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Again, if I haven't said it plainly enough, you did a marvelous job, Debra.
Thank you so much.
fhiwda – Hey there!
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… when I come to the board, the first stories I look for are yours.
Thanks for that honor.
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You do an amazing job at relaying every detail to form a great image in our minds. Even though I started feeling more and more down throughout reading this, it ended on a happy note
I’m glad you thought so.
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...It was a rushed happy ending leading me to believe it wasn't suppose to be, but great job.
Interesting. This was always what I planned for the ending. I think the rest of the story grew larger than I intended but the end was exactly on schedule. Thanks for the insight though about how it seems.
Thanks so much.
KnightlyLove – Well first off, I’ve read part of
your story and enjoyed what I’ve read. It’s intricate and complex and quite a refreshing read. Second, I noticed that you gave me a shout-out in that thread and I really appreciate it. Thank you.
Wow, all night? Cool. I haven’t stayed up all night since my son was born and before that it had probably been 10 years.
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I was *so* sure that poor Dani would be forced to sleep with Lord Finn or whatever. You built that up so much, totally disturbing.... soo glad that it didn't happen!!!
Well, we do have the KB FAQ and KB rules to comfort us in times of fear like that. I will say that in the very paltry portion of the sequel I’ve written, Willow’s sleeping or not sleeping with Lord Finn is one of the very first discussions the reader will encounter. Tee hee.
Interesting that you wondered if Dani had left Tara. I never intended that Dani would have the ability to do that at all. I’m glad you liked the tension tough. Yes, Tara loved Dani truly making her wonder and hope that Dani loved her back. She didn’t need to worry but she did which makes her a very different person from what she could have been.
Yes, the story is largely about free will.
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I'll say that Tara was definitely giving Dani a LOT of credit as an actress. Of everything, I'd say sex is the one thing that it's hard to lie about.
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Lol. ON the other hand, if she was right about the magic, wouldn’t the magic have given Dani the ability to fake it really really well?
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Such a great irony that the "legendary love" of her parents was... kind of... faux.
True dat. At the same time, I sort of wanted her mother’s story to show both that she could love 2 people at the same time and how strong the responsibility for her to carry on her magical line was. And it’s even stronger now for Tara.
I’m glad you liked the list I posted over there. I probably have new ones to add to it now but I’d have to give it some thought.
BeMyDeputy – Hello! I got your PM and I’ll respond to that as well.
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Woah.
That is . . . incredible. Rich, detailed, vibrant. This is absolutely masterfully written.
I’ll take feedback starting like that any time!
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And, total bonus mind-fuck: along the way, you realize that what you're reading about isn't okay. At all. And then everything twists, like the moment in The Shining when you see "red rum" in the mirror and it says "murder" and you're like "SHIT!"
Love it. Anytime someone says some of my writing is a mind-fuck I take that as quite a happy.
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All I can say is that this story makes my ego feel bonus stoked that you read my stuff and like it.
Lol. Can I be honest here? There are times that I’m feedbacking stories and it’s completely obvious to me that the authors have never read anything I’ve written and I’m sort of like… “hey! I know a little of what I’m saying here” but I keep that in my head and move along with the story. You know?
But speaking of your story I truly love it. I love that they’re so sensually verbal and although Willow’s analytical, it’s quite sexy and hot as well.
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And now, back to the author index, to see what else I missed.
Ha ha. Well, I’ve got lots more out there and I could recommend some other good stories if you want.
Thanks so much.
Promthea128 – Thanks so much. Wow. A million and two m&ms? That would take even me a few days or weeks to eat them. I just had a handful a moment ago but still… Ah. That darned sequel. Well, I’ve written about ½ a chapter of it. Does that count?
Thanks so much.
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I just re-read this story and loved it (once again).
Well, Thank you.
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I was wondering if you still plan to write the sequel... or was it the same story but from Willow's POV?
The sequel would start from about 6 months after this one ended. It would be narrated by Willow and basically tell what is the current situation of their lives and then take them on an adventure to discover Willow’s heritage, the basis of her magic, her father, would she want to make a claim on that estate, and what would they do about children. Right now, it’s all in my head but writing it down is a different thing.