New Fic: Darkness Falls

[Tulipp]

Oh, Kris, you didn't upset me exactly, just moved me in a scary way. I meant it as a compliment, believe it or not. Whatever upset I am is probably from being fool enough to watch BTVS last night.



This was...well, you did such a great job of evoking Tara's terror and her feeling of utter doom at the choice she made. I think it's so difficult to pull off descriptions of place the way you did, but I could really see it, and I could really feel it, and it felt scary. So really, my response was a tribute to your writing more than anything else. I felt emotional.



Having a temporary effect to the Living Death was a brilliant and chilling choice; Tara is in this impossible place now, and it's terrifying. But so well written and so compelling.



Madrine is reminding me a little of Catherine DeNeuve in "The Hunger" at this point. Intentional?



Anyway, sorry if I accidentally suggested that I didn't love it. I do. This is one of my favorite stories right now.

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"But I’m, by God, not going to walk away because I think it *might* not work."
--Riley in " Doomed"

[The Big I T]

Yep...I certainly did notice the time of your posting. I was up myself at the time. Printed this off and took it to bed. Didn't sleep. At all. But, y'know, sleep shmeep. Highly over-rated.



That's the sound of the men...working on the chain...ga-a-ang.....That's the sound of the men...working on the chain....gang. *whoa* *yeah* *whoa* *yeah* Well don'tcha know baby ye-ah-ah...I'm comin' ho-ome...to my lover...cuz I feel so a-lo-one...Well, that's the sound of the men, workin' on that chain gang...

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"How 'bout them Broncos..." -- Riley, saying something undeniably charming and useful, in The Initiative

[Puff]

Wow that was scary and chilling as well. I'm not sure how Tara can get out of this one but I'm sure her or Willow will find a way out. The death of the scorpion man was very creepy. I have to say though that I loved this update it's great to see parts fo the whole picture uncovered as you read and you create really graphic images it makes it easy to picture everything that is going on.



Thanks for the update Kris and I'm looking forward to the start of part 3

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You know, it's a real deal relationship and that's why people can relate to it
Amber Benson

[KrisBo5]

Tulipp: Hey, now, it’s all good. I didn’t think you didn’t like it, or anything like that. And, I’m glad it moved you— even if it was in a scary way.



Writing descriptions and such is very hard for me; I’m used to script format, where you just write TARA(angry) and that’s it. Narrative is a whole other beast! So, if I was able to make you ‘see’ and ‘feel’ then, whew!



The Living Death was something I read about in a book about Santeria, and I always thought that that would be so terrifying. It seemed to be a good crux to get Tara where I needed her to go, so. . .



And, now that you bring it up, I do see a bit of The Hunger there. Wow, I’ll have to rent that again & check it out. Hopefully, when Madrine’s story is further revealed, the similarities will end there.



I took nothing you said in a negative way, T, don’t worry! I’m very glad it’s one of your fave’s right now; that’s high praise coming from you! Hopefully, the next update won’t take so long.



The Big I T: You printed it? Wasn’t it like 10 pages? Yipes! And, hey, I love that song! Go, girl!



Puff: I think I mentioned that I wasn’t sure how Tara was going to get out. . . again I ask: any ideas? Hehehe. Glad it’s to your liking, though and I hope you keep reading.



Kris

“Frell that!”

[4WiccanLuv]

"Holy Fricken Mother of *&@#%$"



Kris, this update was so worth the wait!



Madrine is evil personified. The scene where she rips out Scorpion Man's entire throat was gruesome, yet riveting. And let me tell you, the visuals flooding my head, weren't pretty. OMG, poor Tara having to witness all that badness.



This part sent chills up my spine,



She stopped a foot from Tara, her black eyes staring deeply into Tara’s terrified blue. " You will take her place."

"Beside me."

"With me."



As I read this, I found myself answering for Tara, a big fat "no, no phucken way." Pardon my language. Of course, that was her initial reaction too, but when Madrine used Willow's life as a bargaining tool, I knew she was in serious trouble…



I love how Tara's thoughts and fears came through so abundantly clear throughout this update. When she thought of Willow and their love, she became strong and fearless, willing to face anything, willing to die. Her inner struggle to do what she thought was right was excruciatingly painful. Then, after the whole sword/Cassandra deal, only to realize she'd been had…Ugh!



I get the feeling that we've only just scratched the surface of how truly bad this will get for & and the Scoobies, but unlike those who shall remain nameless, I >do< trust you. Kris, you have thoroughly capitvated, entertained and scared me shitless! You rock, thanks!



PS Is it too soon to ask for another update? Hmm *thinks for a moment*…nah…I WANT MORE!

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

Edited by: 4WiccanLuv at: 9/25/02 12:26:39 pm

[Tulipp]

Big IT, nice rendition. Very soulful, with a hint of a pleading note. Excellent tunage.



Kris, if you do watch "The Hunger," enjoy. I have actually never seen the sex scene because apparently every lesbian in Pittsburgh has rented that movie four times and rewound and played back the sex scene ten times.



By the time I got to it, the rest of the videotape was just fine, but that scene was so scrambled that I couldn't even make out a single flash of breast.



Perhaps you'd like to take care of that in one of your next chapters for me, huh?

[The Big I T]

Yes, thank you for noticing Juli. My "tunage" *is* excellent. On the "printed" page.



But I will second that request for breast flashing. Kris? You listening?

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"How 'bout them Broncos..." -- Riley, saying something undeniably charming and useful, in The Initiative

[KrisBo5]

Linda, "Holy Fricken Mother of *&@#%$" LOL! That was so funny, and I love the fainting emoticon(as C will tell you). Glad you thought the update was so worth the wait.



Madrine is pretty nasty, huh? Oh, well. And, you know, I don’t think I describe very well(not Clive Barker here) so if SM’s death was gruesome— yay me! I did feel bad for Tara, though, but what can you do?



I think I may have overdone it with the whole “choice” theme, I know I kept reiterating it, but there’re things coming that will hearken back to these moments and I wanted people to pay attention. I would’ve said ‘no phucken way’ too(LOL by the way), but alas, there was Willow. . . .



I think you’re right, we just scratched the surface, and it’s gonna get darker before it gets lighter! Mwahaha!



Tulipp: LOL! Um, so what you’re telling me is, in all of Pittsburgh, there’s only 1 copy of that movie??? Hmm. As for the taking care of the breast & other spells and witch-stuff, um, er, don’t hold your breath.



The Big I T, re: smut, see above. . . .

Kris

“Frell that!”

Edited by: KrisBo5 at: 9/25/02 2:06:55 pm

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

ok, i'm just reading it. you love them, huh, here they come are you trying to scar me for life? this is too good for words. i'm, you know i won't even start to beg for a new update soon or for smut, you made it clear there will be none, but please don't make me wait another tormenting month for an update.

ok, one more, you deserve it

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[tommo]

Quote:

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Could be the writer in me, or it could be that it sucks

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Well, I'm never happy with what I write. I see it on the board and I'm like "eh...it's alright..."



And please. Don't insult me by suggesting that it sucks. Dear god woman, it's a great story. And when I say great, what I actually mean is great.



See how I emphasised that with meaning?

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"I feel like I've been split down the center and half of me is lost." Yeah Willow, I know exactly what you mean...

[vmpIrslAr]

umm....um...um....



*gulp*



update....please.

VmpIrslAr out.



"she's my everything."

[4WiccanLuv]

What? Kris is sleepy ...aww...poor girl *rushes in with the LazyBoy again, fluffs her pillows, turns down the shades, brings her a nice freshing drink (non alcoholic, of course) and quietly slips out, goes outside and starts a BBQ using all of her invoices and purchase orders instead of charcoal*





Kris, not descirbe well, huh? Ya gotta be kidding me! If you would've described anymore, I would've . Just kidding, but seriously, this update or for that matter, the entire story is beyond amazing! Can hardly wait for more.



Your humble Kitten,

Linda

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

Edited by: 4WiccanLuv at: 9/25/02 5:22:59 pm

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

Linda,

you actually touched Kris' invoices (maybe her vendors too and her puck, the thingy she plays hockey with i assume...) she's gonna kill you, and me too for again cheering you on. good job! so no more invoices for you Kris oh she'll be devastated

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[4WiccanLuv]

C...are you kidding me? I didn't touch her "hockey" thingies, they are sacrosanct, but the girl needs her rest. It's no wonder she isn't getting any sleep, what with all of those distractions around. Not to worry though, I'm sure the vendors and invoices will be banging her door down in no time. For now, I hope Kris is making with the zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz's.



BTW, where's your fiance? She's been MIA, I hope she's alright! We need to triple team Kris, er...um...uh... ya know what mean, right?.



Your fellow harasser,

Linda

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

Edited by: 4WiccanLuv at: 9/25/02 7:54:41 pm

[singgirl]

I'm here! I'm here!! I have to fight for the computer and the time to do something besides practice. You'd think that with all the practicing I do, I'd be an accomplished musician by now...jesus tapdancing christ... Ah well, I am here to assist! Kris!! rock on with your bad self! The update was the shit! Get some rest and then update again! wooooooooooo!!!!!! Go team harassment! woooooooo! Did I mention that I have gotten a total of 9 hours of sleep this week and am thriving on mochas and caffine pills? Oh? It was that obvious?? well! exuuuuuuse me! Aww I can't stay mad at you all for long! mmmwah!

[Latsric]

Good god that was scary. Please tell me it gets better...and soon



-lat-

- I need my obsessions, they keep me sane -

[4WiccanLuv]

Woo Hoo! B, you made it to the party, yay you!



C will be very happy! But ya gotta take it easy with the caffeine though , it can't be good for you.



Go Team Harassment, I like that!



Let the games begin!



Kris, you know we ya, right?



Linda

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

Edited by: 4WiccanLuv at: 9/25/02 9:33:20 pm

[KrisBo5]

tommo, eeps, I would never, ever insult you. Uh-uh, no way, no day. You must know by now, I worship you! Er, your writing I mean. Well, ok, be that way, then. You! I worship you! Jeez! Thanks for the ego boost. . . .



vmpIrslAr, why, thank you. . . thank you very much.



Latsric, well, I’d really love to tell ya it gets better, um, but, well, where’s the fun in that. . . ?



Linda, ooh, a nice comfy chair, and a drink and invoice/po arson? I am in accounting heaven. Woo-hoo! My humble Kitten? Hmm, *Kris rubs her hand along her chin in a thoughtful gesture* Yeah, I kinda like that. . . .



B, um, child, you need a little decaf. Really. Decaf, check it out. But, thank you—look at all the jumping beanie emoticon thingies. Now, when you say my update was “the shit,” that’s a good thing, right? Kidding, kidding.



C, yay-yay-yay! Fainting emoticons. Fainting emoticons G-A-L-O-R-E! Thank you! As for updates or SI, I’ll probably start on it tomorrow night. Just needed a night off, for rest and inspiration, you know(no, no hockey or vendors or anything like that; rest I say, rest. . . jeez, always with the mind in the proverbial gutter, huh? I knew I liked you for more than your keen harassment sense). . . .



Now, B, C, & Linda(Puff, too), my own little Team Harassment, may I admire you? You are wonderful. I thank you. So much. . .



Kris

“Frell that!”

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

yay we have a team!

B, love

i so missed you! tell those evil teachers to give you a break, as much as i like my baby high on coffee i prefer you to be high on ... on other things. and the team harassement thing was very inspired

Linda,

yes sacrosanct my ass. those thingies have seen many way less than sacred things, with all the naughtyness that defines Kris ... i shudder to think of the implications

Kris,

i forgot to congratulate you on the impressive use of so many languages i especially like the Hungarian Piroska i always sounded so funny to me as i heard Hungarian all the time at my grandparents, i don't speak it though anymore. cool thing you did there.

and i now patiently await the promising and -worthy looking SMUTUS.

do not underestimate team harassment, you'll post sonner or later

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[barnabasvamp]

Joining in on the harassment, I felt I had to after that last wonderful update!

The use of different languages was well thought out and appropriate for the scene you were portraying. Bravo

How will our Tara get out of this one?

Waiting, not so patiently

More! More!

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

yay and the team is getting mightier, we have another member. Kris don't you just love the harassment vibes

welcome barnabasvamp feel free to harass Kris loud, often and well ... every day if possible, multiple times a day

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[singgirl]

C, I agree! Go us! We are a large team now, and quite frankly, Kris hasn't a prayr! mwahahahahaha

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

yeah baby,

Kris is against an army now mwhahahaha

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[4WiccanLuv]

C… sacrosanct my ass (LOL ), you're right, if only those "thingies" could talk!



B…ya had me worried there for a sec….what with all the . BTW, what instrument do you practice?



Welcome barnabasvamp, Kris being harassed. She craves it, she needs it, she wants it. Have at it!



So Kris, now that you've had some much needed rest, you're furiously writing another long long long ass update, right? Cuz, we need to get Tara outta there, I'm afraid for her. I can't sleep, I can't eat, I think you broke me. Hrmph!…I need fix'n, pronto!



BTW, been in accounting for over 15 yrs. So, an innocent daydreamy arson, in which all the paperwork goes up in a blaze of glory, gives me a happy.



Proud Member of team Harassment,

Linda

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

Edited because i seem capable to post again not once but twice.

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

Edited by: IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous at: 9/26/02 11:14:53 am

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

Linda,

"if those thingies could talk" if they could blush or faint out of sheer embarassment i'm sure they would Kris what was it again you play hockey with: sticks?

and Linda's right, you've had enough sleep: WE WANT SMUTUS c'mon team harassment join in, marching and shouting in front of Kris' workplace: WE WANT SMUTUS, NOW!! power to the smutusless! and Tara out of that dungeon! but first things first: smutus, smutus, smutus ...

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)

[4WiccanLuv]

*holds up picket signs and joins C in the marching*



"WE'RE HERE, WE'RE…well..er..um..yeah,

WE WANT SMUTUS"



"HONK IF YOU WANT SMUTUS"



"WE DEMAND UPDATES, NOW"



"FAIR TREATMENT OF TEAM HARRASSMENT"

- Dime con quien andas y te dire quien eres -

[KrisBo5]

My, my, my, look at the harassment party going on in my thread. You all are so fun! Sorry I haven’t been here, but I had to go out and about for work. Anywho. . .



barnabasvamp, hey, a new voice amid the masses! Thank you. Glad you decided to pipe in!



B, haven’t got a prayer, huh? Well, I kinda like the sound of that. . . . Have you come down from your caf high? You need some sleep, girl.



C, of course I love all the harassment vibes. I live for it. You know I do. And all the fainting, love it, love it, love it!



As for all the foreign languages, praise whoever for the babelfish translator & the baby name generator! Glad it somewhat impressed you. I live to do so.



And again & again with the smut. Don’t you want to read some good smut? Like tommo or Tulipp or Sassette? I like reading those ladies. . . . Okay, okay, okay, I’ll see what I can, um, er come up with.



Linda, didn’t mean to break you, fine lady. Just trying to bring on the, well, you know, ‘darkness.’ Actually didn’t get much sleep last night(and unfortunately it had nothing to do with hockey or invoices, drat!). And, hey, gotta love those signs. . .

Kris

“Frell that!”

[singgirl]

Linda,

I am a singer, but am learning how to play guitar and piano.

By the way, HONK!! I want smut! I'm more down from my caffine high than I thought possible right now. Anyway, I am leaving Friday, and don't know when I'll be back, so until then, my love to you all.

[IsayAmberBensonsgorgeous]

Linda,

here for you standing ovations. you make me proud *sniff*

B,

you're leaving. NO!!!!!!!

Kris,

i read it all. there are just 3 or 4 stories in the entire Pens Archive that i haven't read. and then i read some more and re-read. so i need fresh flesh, i can't fool my mind anymore and i can't wait for years to pass so that i may forget some of the stories so you see i'm desperate. help me (this means in this context falling on my knees before you). as you see the revolution has already started you're surrounded by the harassment team there's no escape (evil laugh) SMUTUS

C

"Es ist fuer einen Menschen unertraeglich, ertragen zu werden." (Jean Cocteau)
"Ain't never gonna love you any better babe - And they'll never gonna love you right" (Kozmic Blues - Janis Joplin)