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Story: Freak Show

Postby DarkChild » Wed Nov 24, 2004 6:34 pm







Freak Show







Rating: PG-13-R



Notes: This is an original story. I got the idea and I HAD to write it. Hope you all enjoy.



If anyone has any songs or poems that they’d like to give me to use, I’d be really thankful (and you’d get credit, don’t worry.) Thanks.



Feedback: Do I need to ask?



Disclaimer: I don’t own Here Without You (by Three Doors Down)



Summary: Two lonely souls are united, one from the wrong side of town, the other, a superstar with a dark secret.











One











Michelle groaned, picking up the bill. Seeing the many zeroes, she sighed. This wasn’t her day. Then again, most days weren’t her day. She’d had to skip class again to bail her cousin out of trouble. Again. David was a pain; there was no other way to describe him. Unfortunately, he was…maybe not her best friend, but he was close enough.



She slunk onto her bed. The bills were pilling up; if it went on, there’d be no way she could keep the apartment.



If David helped things would be easier, but…he couldn’t keep a job for anything. He took one look at a cute boy and lost interest in everything else. Of course, she could claim the same thing when she saw a pretty girl, but…well…she just had better control.



Her hand reached out and grabbed one of the books lying on her dresser: The Last Unicorn. The blonde smiled; she loved that book. Then again, she loved almost all books.



Grinning, she opened the worn novel.





***





“I’m back!” The dark haired man shuffled in through the door. “Man, this place is a mess! It seems even smaller than usual!”



Michelle scowled at him. “That’s ‘cause you can’t clean up after yourself. And why the hell were you picking fights?”



“Hey! That guy was insulting my honor!”



“What honor!” She yelled, “You have no honor! You’re an eighteen year old gay boy who’s still a senior in high school! And, oh yeah! I’m stuck babysitting you!!!” She slammed her door shut.



“C’mon Chelle!” he whined, “You don’t mean that!”



The door remained shut tight.





***





When she came out, it was late, though that didn’t bother her. She was a night person.



She scowled when she saw David, sprawled out on his pull-out bed, flipping TV channels.



He looked up at her with big chocolate eyes. “Are you still mad?” She pouted. “Pleeeaaassseeee forgive me?”



Michelle sighed, she couldn’t stay mad at him, he was just too sweet.



A toon started playing on the radio and he perked up. “I love this song!” He grinned.











A hundred days have made me older, since the last time that I saw your pretty face

A thousand lies have made me colder and I don’t think I can look at this the same

But all the miles that separate

They disappear now when I’m dreaming of your face






Come to think of it, this isn’t that bad, she thought.





I’m here without you baby but your still on my lonely mind

I think about you baby and I dream about you all the time

I’m here without you baby but your still with me in my dreams

And tonight, there’s only you and me






It sounded vaguely familiar. It was probably one of those dumb teenyboppergirl singers.





The miles just keep rolling as the people leave their way to say hello

I've heard this life is overrated but I hope that this gets better as we go



I’m here without you baby but your still on my lonely mind

I think about you baby and I dream about you all the time

I’m here without you baby but your still with me in my dreams

And tonight girl, there’s only you and me






Nice though.





Everything I know, and anywhere I go

it gets hard but it won’t take away my love

And when the last one falls, when it’s all said and done

it gets hard but it won’t take away my love



I’m here without you baby but your still on my lonely mind

I think about you baby and I dream about you all the time

I’m here without you baby but your still with me in my dreams

And tonight girl, there’s only you and me



I’m here without you baby but your still on my lonely mind

I think about you baby and I dream about you all the time

I’m here without you baby but your still with me in my dreams

but tonight girl, there’s only you and me






The song ended.



Michelle looked over at David. “Who was that?”



“You’re talking to me?!” He grinned. “Yes!” She eyed him. “Oh, yeah…heh…Azure, that’s what she calls herself.”



“She named herself after a color?” She stared at him. These singers just get weirder and weirder.



“Well,” he began, “She is blue.”



“Huh?”



“She dyed her hair blue. And she paints her skin blue. Hence the name.”



Yep, definitely getting weirder.



David smirked. “You know, you’d probably find her pretty cute. I mean, you do like the weird ones.”



“What’s that supposed to mean?”



“Oh, nothing.”





***





She gently put her book onto the dresser. Staring at her clock, she sighed. Please let tomorrow be better. Don’t let David fight again. Let me get a raise. Her eyes found the picture on the nightstand. In it were her and her parents. Please let them forgive me.















***



So, what do you all think? Questions? Comments?
















"Death cannot stop true love. It can only delay it." The Princess Bride



*****



BeastBoy: She thinks I'm funny.



Raven:Statistically, I suppose, somebody has to.

Edited by: DarkChild at: 12/14/04 4:05 pm
DarkChild
 


Re: Story: Freak Show

Postby Kathryn91628 » Wed Nov 24, 2004 8:42 pm

Cool story, sounds quite interesting. Wonder what'll happen next- how does Michelle meet this superstar, Azure? (nice name by the way, very pretty colour).. assuming that Azure is the girl she meets.



cheers

~Kat

Kathryn91628
 


Re: Story: Freak Show

Postby little miss 666 » Wed Nov 24, 2004 9:21 pm

woah...i'm intrigued! All of the character's u've made mention of sound really interesting! I wanna hear more about the Azure chick!



gimme! gimme! gimme! lol, in ur own time ofcourse :D





- Bell :)

The shape of you

Is etched inside

My bruised and somewhat sculptured mind

little miss 666
 


Re: loved it

Postby JulesP600 » Sat Nov 27, 2004 12:28 pm

This is good :)



I like the way that Michelle looks after David. Pretty true to a few people's lives!!! :p



I hope Michelle gets to meet this Azure girl and that David sorts himself out and starts helping too.



Can't wait for more :D



Jules :love

The only way to have a friend is to be one

JulesP600
 


Re: loved it

Postby WickedReds » Sun Nov 28, 2004 7:24 pm

Interseting.... i like it... if u want poems u can use some of mine if they fit where u want them too...



-reds:willow



Mein Banane tanzt für Schmutz :banana

Smutbunny Anthem: *sung to tune from Goldfinger* Smutbunnies...they'e the bunnies, the bunnies that love the smut...and Willow's butt. They surf for smut fiction...always lookin' for the next naked sweaty fix...of Tara's tits.- Written By Cameron(tarawhipped) For Us Smut Bunnies

WickedReds
 


songs and poems

Postby DarkChild » Sun Nov 28, 2004 9:02 pm

That would be great WickedReds. The reason I need them is because, as many of you have probable guessed, Azure is a singer. I'm kinda hoping not to use too many radio songs.



Thanks.



I'm also working on a banner for the story. I hope to have it done in a few days. (It's in the coloring stage right now)








"Death cannot stop true love. It can only delay it." The Princess Bride



*****



BeastBoy: She thinks I'm funny.



Raven:Statistically, I suppose, somebody has to.

DarkChild
 


Freak Show

Postby DarkChild » Tue Nov 30, 2004 3:40 pm

Well everone, chapter two should be done soon. I've got the banner done, but my computer won't scan it in.) I'm getting a computer notepad for Hanukka, so my banners should get a little better.








"Death cannot stop true love. It can only delay it." The Princess Bride



*****



BeastBoy: She thinks I'm funny.



Raven:Statistically, I suppose, somebody has to.

DarkChild
 


Chapter Two

Postby DarkChild » Mon Dec 06, 2004 7:04 pm



Thank you all for all the feedback!





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Rating: PG-13-R



Notes: This is an original story. I got the idea and I HAD to write it. Hope you all enjoy.



If anyone has any songs or poems that they’d like to give me to use, I’d be really thankful (and you’d get credit, don’t worry.) Thanks.



Feedback: Do I need to ask?



Disclaimer: I own! Yay!



Summary: Two lonely souls are united, one from the wrong side of town, the other, a superstar with a dark secret.











Two











Tamsin scowled as she slammed the door shut. Stupid, no good…no…brained people! She’d probably drop down dead if one of them had an original thought.



She really missed having company that could actually think.



She picked up a piece of paper and started writing.




















“Hey Miki!” The blonde jogged over.



Michelle groaned, “You know I hate it when you call me that.”



“C’mon!” Shira grinned, “It makes you sound so much more interesting…more…cooler!”



“Did I ask to be cooler?”



“Nope! That’s why it’s called ‘charity’.”



“Shira.”



“Yes?”



The brunette scowled “You’re not blonde! Stop giving a bad name to those that are!” She stalked away. Leaving the surprised girl staring at her.




















“Hey ‘Chelle!” David threw himself down next to her.



“Hello.”



“You could at least look up from your computer.” The young man smiled at her.



“What?” She brushed her brown hair away from her face. “I need to get this term paper finished.”



David grinned. “I met this girl earlier today. I think you’ll like her.”



“No.”



“But you don’t even know what it was I was going to ask you.” He pouted. “Pleeeaassee! Just listen.”



Rolling her eyes, Michelle sighed. “Alright, what is it you want to ask me?”

“Okay! So, as I was saying, I met this girl earlier, and you don’t have to worry, she’s gay. I’ve learned from the last time.” Michelle shuddered. “Anyway, we were talking and I told her about you!”



“No.”



“Well…here’s the thing, I kinda already told her that you would go out with her. Please don’t be mad!”



“Call her!”



“What?!”



“Call her and say no!”



“I can’t! I didn’t get her number. You’ll just have to go and meet her there.”



“I really hate you.”
















This is it?! The place was…well…sleazy. It was no place she’d choose for a date. She looked at the paper in her hand. On it was scribbled the girl’s name: Panther. What the hell? What kinda name is that? It sounds so…



“Hey there,” a voice purred in her ear.



Michelle spun around to meet her ‘attacker’. She gulped, praying that the woman wasn’t Panther. She was decked out completely in leather. She had long black hair tied in a tight ponytail and her face was caked in makeup. She practically screamed slut.



“I’m Panther, and you must be Michelle.”



Oh crap! Must leave! Must leave!



“Uhh…hi?” The brunette quickly looked around, eager to find some hope of salvation.



“Your cousin didn’t say you were this cute.” There was a predatory look in her eyes.



“Look…uh…”



“Maybe you wanna head on inside.” She gestured toward the club behind them. Her arm snaked out and latched onto Michelle’s.



Michelle wriggled away. “Okay.” Panther smirked.












The first thing that Michelle became aware of was the blaring music. And her now pounding head.



She heard Panther say something to her. “What?” She yelled back. She didn’t get an answer. Panther dragged her out to the dance floor.



Michelle frantically tried to keep up with the beat while at the same time, trying to figure out how to end the date.



She had no idea what to do when Panther’s lips latched onto her own. She stood frozen, but for only a moment, then she pushed the other woman away. “I’d really appreciate it if you wouldn’t do that.”



“C’mon!”



“I’d really-“



“Hey there!” Both women stopped and turned to face the newcomer.



Panther frowned. “Scram.”



The blonde glared at the slut. She turned to Michelle. “How about a dance?” Michelle eagerly agreed, anything to get away from Panther.












"Death cannot stop true love. It can only delay it." The Princess Bride



*****



BeastBoy: She thinks I'm funny.



Raven:Statistically, I suppose, somebody has to.

DarkChild
 


Replies

Postby beautifultrgdy » Mon Dec 06, 2004 7:16 pm

Hello There!



The most that I can say about this story is that while I totally like it, and want to read more... You aren't giving me enough. There is practically no dialogue that stays consistant, and the filler that gives details to a novel is missing.



The jumping around is a little frustrating, but other than a few minor things it is coming along beautifully. I adore this story and would LOVE to read more.



toodles

beautifultrgdy
 


Re: Replies

Postby shadowygirl » Tue Dec 07, 2004 7:44 pm

AHHHHH thats it so far ?! where is the rest ?! I never usally read fics in the inward eye but I'm totally hooked so you must update !!!



luv April

shadowygirl
 


Re: Replies

Postby WickedReds » Tue Dec 07, 2004 10:58 pm

Haha David Hooking her up on a date... Whos the girl that got her way from the scary leather chick??



-reds:willow



Mein Banane tanzt für Schmutz :banana

Smutbunny Anthem: *sung to tune from Goldfinger* Smutbunnies...they'e the bunnies, the bunnies that love the smut...and Willow's butt. They surf for smut fiction...always lookin' for the next naked sweaty fix...of Tara's tits.- Written By Cameron(tarawhipped) For Us Smut Bunnies

WickedReds
 


Re: Replies

Postby JulesP600 » Sun Dec 12, 2004 12:05 pm

Love it! Want more though. It is keeping me hooked as I want to know what happens next for sure :confused



Jules :love

The only way to have a friend is to be one

JulesP600
 


Re: Replies

Postby sam darls » Sun Dec 12, 2004 1:18 pm

Ooh I'm hooked too..this is so interesting :love . Love sam xx

"Sometimes things happen between people that you don't really expect. And sometimes the things that are important are the ones that seem the weirdest or the most wrong. And those are the ones that change your life." - Jessie Sammler (Evan Rachel Wood)

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