infinitelight - Thank you muchly, though i often find that my rhythm feels off. Good to know someone disagrees. Yeah, I'm quite partial to the Jupiter line as well.
With the 2nd poem, the air breathed through your mouth line is where it all started, so I am more than pleased that you liked it.
As for the 3rd, it was confrontational and almost stayed that way through the end, but I decided to chill out a bit on it. You know, laid back, mellow, kinda groovy.
I suppose I should warn you that the next one here is not nearly as comforting. Sorry.pacou - Hee. Take all the time you need. I know I do.
And yes, food for thought is always good. 
Then again, I just like food in general....Tara22 - Thanks darlin'. Yeah, late at night works, but I must warn you, it can cause one to be a titch slow in the mornings.
thehighpriestess - Oh dear, you didn't know of this thread? I really must fire that damn secretary of mine. Glad you liked really do hope that you stop in again. Likewise, it was nice to speak at you as well. It was scary???
I'm sorry dear, but really, I don't bite.... hard. Laura - Oh I have faith that you can keep up. I'm thinking I may not be able to pull off that 1/2 dozen after all.
Thank you for the ego padding my dear, but I'm really not amazing. I just keep finding new goads for my word-spinning ass. (at ungodly hours at that) Of course you are forgiven. How could I not forgive my favorite dragon? That would just be wrong. Although to guarantee that it is never mentioned, I may just require potatoes at odd hours. (perhaps when the muse is operational?)
You can fit through the bars?
You're such an idiot. ok and now some pointless drivel that while likely be edited at a currently undisclosed date. (oh yeah, it's a bit of a mood swing. sorry, not in the best of moods this evening)
there are words
soft enough
to put your sweet head
to rest
syllables of comfort
murmurs whispered
of solace
funny that they chose to
flee from when
i did need them the most
no matter
they would likely do us
no good
at any rate
as right now
the only sound
my heart can
allow itself to know
is the slamming
of that damn door
your parting words
still ringing in
my ears
moments ago i had
so very much to say
so very quickly
with so little thought
but it is for certain now
that it was all
wrong
*woof*
I will go put some clothes on, ok.
Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!
However, I do understand how when the muse strikes you must go with it. Now onto your poem...Let me think...Oh yes! DAMN!! Go you! I rather liked the flow to this one. It is like a tide of emotions. A gentle rolling of the tide out to sea only to have it come crashing back to shore. I love it. I am especially fond of these lines:
Need more! Now! Now! 
-Viv-
Lovely poem! 
yeah, it must be the water, explains a lot i think. 
cause you know i am all sweetness and light. 
and yeah, i would love to know who THEY are precisely.