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Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:57 am

We met twice in the same day before we realised. Not so much old friends as people who ran the gauntlet of adolescence, thrown together by geographical proximity and tormented by emotional distances. Ours was a symbiotic relationship; the only two kids on a council block in the middle of the biggest dump in Europe, possibly the world. We played together not out of friendship, but a shared desire to be away from home. I knew the places to avoid in rough games, the tender areas his father favoured. He knew that when I’d dressed myself there was a good chance I’d be going without dinner, so he’d come with me to steal food from the supermarket.

Now, 23 years later, he’s a lawyer. He visits his father in prison once a month at the request of his mother, who still doesn’t know he took the brunt of his father’s ire. I, having been shuffled between foster homes for most of my young life became, of all things, a social worker.

They took us both on the same day. My mother forgot the date of her final evaluation, which was unsurprising since she couldn’t remember to feed me without a Social Services letter taped to her bottle of Jack. She hadn’t remembered, and I didn’t know, so when the S.S. came calling neither my mother nor his father could put on their usual show. The social worker heard him and his father and thought I was being beaten. She left and came back with two police cars and an ambulance. He left with the paramedics. His father went in panda car number one. I went in number two. The S.S. weren’t into subtlety when removing children from their homes, it seemed.

As it turned out, he was under instruction to find out from me when the social worker was coming round to assess ‘that neglectful bint downstairs’ so his father could keep the noise down. What a considerate man. We sit in silence, reflecting on bitter ironies. Eventually, I speak.

“I never really liked you, Sam, but you were a good cell-mate.”

He smiles. “Yeah,” he replies, “Well I near enough hated you, but I may well owe you my life.”

He has to leave for a hearing. We don’t exchange numbers.


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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby Boschi » Mon Aug 14, 2006 5:42 pm

Hmmm.

It's a satisfying bite in and of itself. I can't decide if I've had enough however - is this a stand alone piece?

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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Tue Aug 15, 2006 6:10 am

it is. I suppose i could be persuaded to write the full story, if asked nicely lol
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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby Boschi » Thu Sep 07, 2006 5:40 pm

Hmmm... :) My request is tardy I'm afraid, but if whatever moved you to write this is still lingering a bit in the ether then I think you should lasso the sunuvabitch and play with this more.

Um, right. Ask nicely. Umm.

So you are very good at making the unknown complex - you do this well in your short pieces, which are remarkably short yet satisfyingly complete. But while the foreplay is good, and an art unto itself, it will only take you so far. So bravo, but occassionally you have to go for the follow through, or else it is all coyness and vagary. If you can, every once in a blue moon, deliver what you imply so well. Keeps us holding our breaths better, hoping that this time, maybe this time, we'll get more.

hmph. Right. nice. I'm really no good at this.

How about "pretty please with sunflowers, fried potatoes, night rains and clean socks on top" (hey, they make me happy)

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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Fri Sep 08, 2006 5:24 am

I'm with you on the foreplay thing, but which part do you feel I should develop? The pre-story story or the post-story story, so to speak?
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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby barnabasvamp » Fri Sep 08, 2006 6:03 pm

Hmmm....I would think the "pre-story" might be the place to continue. I think it might be interesting to hear about their connection.

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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Sat Sep 09, 2006 1:31 pm

I'll see if I can coax the muse out for a little try. No promises though. He's a stubborn little git.
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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby Boschi » Wed Sep 20, 2006 6:47 pm

Oh! You have a boy muse! How fascinating.

Hmmmm.... pre or post? Well, you imply so well - tell us one through the other. Maybe explain the condition of your narrators life and in doing so indirectly reference the pre. Or explain why the post was so necessary, and in doing so explain the pre. Or go for the pre up front and in doing so reveal the motivations and actions of the narrator in present day (sort of the immediate post).

Hmmm - not so specific, heh?

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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Thu Sep 21, 2006 7:35 am

Yep, boy muse. Why's that interesting? I've had a few ideas about expanding it, but nothing concrete yet. I'll keep working.
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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby Boschi » Thu Sep 21, 2006 6:09 pm

I dunno - the whole concept of the Muse is usually female. Ask Kieli - I believe she once described hers as a "wanton harlot"....

I have this unreasonable grudge against wikipedia (it's irrational, don't ask, I can't justify it at all). All the same: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Muse

Lovely idea really. I'm also fond of the notion of the Furies (Erinyes). Gaggles of Greek goddesses (demi-goddesses...whatever)....yum.

But I'm all for gender liberated mythos, so whatever or whoever squeezes the words out, more credit to them. You go, you little git, you go....

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Re: Short Story - Chance Encounter

Postby NewRuthRising » Fri Sep 22, 2006 10:21 am

I have a vague idea of how to continue the story, but I could use someone to bounce ideas off of. Anyone feel like being a rubber wall?
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